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at the corner of boone trails and owen
she learned the brevity of flight:
glinting bumper for launch pad
trajectory approximately 5 feet
across the median.

she pirouetted
as proud, as swift
as any prima ballerina
but the landing
proved rough.

this I keep for her -
the listless weight of limbs
defying gravity, the beastly beauty
of a body bouyant before
its death.
Saw a girl hit by a car today. Had to write something for her.
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beautyinreview Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wish there was something deep and meaningful I could say about this piece, but I can't think of anything. i think you captured the ephemeral quality of the moment really well. That moment where it all seems to hang in the air, like "is this really happening?" - pirouetted...as any prima ballerina, listless weight of limbs, body bouyant.

A lovely, delicate, sad tribute.
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LiliWrites May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :hug:
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Astrikos Oct 13, 2012   General Artist
So beautiful.
This is also really sad. Prayers sent out for the girl. :rose:
I love the structure and power. :hug:
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LiliWrites Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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Astrikos Oct 17, 2012   General Artist
:hug:
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falcorn0squirrel Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am so sorry, for that girl and for you, it's not easy to see something like that. The poem is beautiful and i think she would love it.
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LiliWrites Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Hfeather53 Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. Great work.
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LiliWrites Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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wyldhoney Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:( Poor girl. I fortunately haven't seen many accidents, but the ones I did are burned into my memory.
Still, to find beauty in something horrible is what makes someone a true artist, I feel.
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