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at the corner of boone trails and owen
she learned the brevity of flight:
glinting bumper for launch pad
trajectory approximately 5 feet
across the median.

she pirouetted
as proud, as swift
as any prima ballerina
but the landing
proved rough.

this I keep for her -
the listless weight of limbs
defying gravity, the beastly beauty
of a body bouyant before
its death.
Saw a girl hit by a car today. Had to write something for her.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014
Tremendous.
Hope the girl was okay.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
She died instantly. At least she didn't feel it.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2014
Damn...
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beautyinreview Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wish there was something deep and meaningful I could say about this piece, but I can't think of anything. i think you captured the ephemeral quality of the moment really well. That moment where it all seems to hang in the air, like "is this really happening?" - pirouetted...as any prima ballerina, listless weight of limbs, body bouyant.

A lovely, delicate, sad tribute.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :hug:
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012   General Artist
So beautiful.
This is also really sad. Prayers sent out for the girl. :rose:
I love the structure and power. :hug:
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012   General Artist
:hug:
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falcorn0squirrel Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am so sorry, for that girl and for you, it's not easy to see something like that. The poem is beautiful and i think she would love it.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. Great work.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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wyldhoney Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:( Poor girl. I fortunately haven't seen many accidents, but the ones I did are burned into my memory.
Still, to find beauty in something horrible is what makes someone a true artist, I feel.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha. Or a true escapist. :P
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AimeeRaindrop Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Gosh terrible that you had to witness something so awful but out of it came a brilliant piece and kinda nice because it's like a memory of her - she made an impact (no pun intended) on your life.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It is certainly a day I'll never forget.
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Student Writer
Wow. This is really well written. Poor girl. :nod:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Her obit showed up last week. :( I guess she lived through the accident itself, but not for long after.
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Writer
:( That's awful...
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I once witnessed a girl getting hit by a car, too, and you've captured it exactly as I remember it--the oddly graceful action, the stunned reaction and the terrifying feeling of shock and helplessness. Reading this struck something really deep in me. Thank you for expressing what I could not.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: I'm sorry you had to witness it.
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It happened in front of an entire line of school buses, and everyone on them knew her. Thankfully, she survived. I'm so sorry yours did not.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh. I didn't know the girl at least. That would have been too much.
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry you did too. :heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012
Good to see this get some attention. I loved it.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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leyghan Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A beautiful tribute.
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Professional Writer
beautiful capture
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012   Writer
This is so sad, yet so well-written, it evokes every image you saw, plus the sudden and swift end. Thank you. :+fav:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading! :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012   Writer
:heart:
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Solarune Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012   Writer
I am so sorry for the girl, & her family, & that you had to see this. I hope you're OK. :tighthug: And I am so glad you wrote this because it is full of life. I don't see a girl dying when I read this, I see a girl dancing. Because the last stanza. Wow. And ouch. But the middle stanza with the ballerina draws you back to it as if it is the focus of the poem.
(sorry for incoherence) :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I was going for the life angle more than anything. So many poems describe a body after it dies, but I don't think that's how any of us want to be remembered. :hug:
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Kaz-D Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Love this Lili :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thanks.
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Quolia Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I have chosen your lovely poem to be the Deviation of the Week on my page :tighthug:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much! :heart: What an honor.
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Venry Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student General Artist
It's so powerful... :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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childwoman Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Yeash. Reminds me of my piece ([link]) about when the train I was on hit that guy, but worse - you saw it! I particularly enjoy the ambiguity - it wasn't entirely clear to me what was going on until I read your description. Indeed, I had the image of a child playing, perhaps rollerskating or skateboarding, rather than of a road traffic accident. The death bit at the end threw me and I had to read through after the description to put it all together. I hope you're feeling ok - it's terrible to witness these things, but the beauty that comes from them is a small comfort.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I changed the last line of the first stanza. Does that help clarify what's happening in the poem?
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childwoman Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Very much so - but I wasn't saying that it needed to be changed. I actually liked the ambiguity quite a bit.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm alright. Death happens. Sometimes it happens suddenly. My heart goes out to that poor girl's family though.
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:reading: ---> :+fav:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Writer
That is an amazing poem. But a sad story.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was very sad. I can't help but wonder what her family is doing now.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Student Writer
*sniffle*
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