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You know, I do love my country. I just don't like the direction it's headed.

1-5-13: Added a few more memories. :)

5-22-13: Belated thanks to ^neurotype and =doughboycafe for the DD!! :heart:

11-1-13: Cleaned up a bit of language use and punctuation. 
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Given 2013-04-16
Gulls Say It Best is a meditation on America by `Kneeling-Glory. ( Suggested by doughboycafe and Featured by neurotype )
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Writer
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Beyond-An-Anomaly Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Student General Artist
This is gorgeous. It tells such a beautiful story of an American journey, and it gives a perspective of America that's sadly kinda easy to forget nowadays because of...well, obvious reasons. I found it a nice touch that you brought up states that are easy to forget, like Oregon and Montana, but they actually happen to be some of the most beautiful.

Very, very nicely written. Awesome work, may I say. :D

-BAA
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :) 
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Beyond-An-Anomaly Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Student General Artist
No problem. Nice work! :D
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I love it too.
This is wonderfully done. :sun:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're one of my :+fav: writers. 
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw! Thank you! :heart:
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julietcaesar Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The last one about Seattle was the one that resonated with me most, although I still dig the rest of the imagery. :)

I'm going to have to explain why in person. :P
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You'll be able to do that soon. :eager:
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PhoenixScribe Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Student Writer
Your piece was made most beautiful by the comment that you made. I completely agree with you.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you.
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thesquareroot Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
superb
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much!
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spraypaintking Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Artist
Montana's description amazes me.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D It was the first bit I wrote.
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ellesea Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sweet glory this is gorgeous.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you!
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Karinta Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student General Artist
I love number 5 the best. It perfectly exemplifies what is so wonderful about the Rockies and the West.

And I agree with the caption.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I first crossed the Rockies at night during mid-summer. I will never forget how bright everything was, even without a moon. :)
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Karinta Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student General Artist
True. :-)
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RavensHiddenSoul Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
Perfect example of how so few words can be so potent and laden with emotion... ~<3
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: I try to exercise brevity as often as I can. I'm glad it worked well in this.
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Random-Star Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful memories. Congratulations on the DD, very well-deserved.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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Random-Star Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure. :)
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Lucernne Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. <3
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Hiland-Rose Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter
Thank you for saying it. I am with you all the way in this thought process. I live in Colorado and can't imagine a more beautiful place than the mountains after the sun goes down and the sounds of the cities die away... I love the imagery you create of all of the places you visit in this poem... gorgeous work, and a pleasant reminder that there really is no place like home!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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AlanaRoze Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Student General Artist
This is beautiful; makes me miss home and everything it meant to me. Very moving work.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: They say home is where the heart is, but I think home is the place that's waitin for your heart.
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KedakaiOkami Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really liked the first section. Congrats on the DD
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much! :)
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Gay-Mountain Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
So I have this James Wright-based obsession with America, especially all that states I don't know enough about to place on a map properly. So this poem is basically everything I want to write and everything I want to do. The opening's excellent; I don't think I could have stopped after that second sentence. The final two lines are just swearword incredible; it's kind of difficult to talk about.
Congrats on the DD and I'm genuinely looking forward to checking out the rest of your gallery. But first I'm gonna sleep or else I'd face plant this laptop.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I hope you go experience America for yourself. It is an incredible place. :)
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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snowrite Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
This is really fantastic. :meow: I love how efficient each vignette is, and how descriptive without being verbose. Each section has a very haiku-ish sort of feel. I think that ii. is my favourite, it feels so poignant.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I love the haiku form. :)
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Kallios Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
I took a road trip from my native Maryland all the way to Montana, and you summarized my favorite memories of the state perfectly: the stars, the sunrises, and how simple things managed to look beautiful.

Also. "Learn from us, they begged. And let us fade into irrelevance." is such a very powerful line. I'm going to have to quote you someday.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :heart: I love road trips. I'll bet you had some epic moments on yours. Did you write about it?
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Kallios Featured By Owner May 23, 2013
XD yep I did. I've got a couple of journal entries about the trip.
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ColoringTheRain Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This makes me just want to hop in a car and roadtrip it out...
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Go! Go! Go! You will not regret it.
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aurora-celest Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
"Learn from us, they begged. And let us fade into irrelevance."

What a powerful line.

Learn from their sufferings and all their sacrifices. Remember the time when people of color were persecuted over something so trivial. And when the time comes for human beings look at one another and not see skin first, but the true man hidden beneath the skin, let the memories of the Civil Rights fighters fade away. Let their sufferings of before, during, and after be forgotten. With their task completed, why should their grandchildren focus on such harsh memories? Let them forget the existence of the concepts of nonsensical hatred, let them forget any grudge they may bear against the descendants of ignorant ancestors.

At least that's my interpretation of the lines. Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong and/or if you care. :shrug:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think you got it perfectly. :)
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013   General Artist
Every section was excellent, but the part about the Dakotas left the deepest impression on me. I don't even like being in the countryside, but you described it in such original and captivating terms it almost makes me want to give it another chance. I guess it was the line about being "allowed to be small." It communicates the idea of not taking oneself and one's endeavors so seriously, and just taking the time to relax and take it all in.

With that in mind, listen to Home by Above and Beyond. It really sets the mood.
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