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How to Make Yourself A(live)

Written while listening to: [link]

Provided by :iconglossolalias:

Lovely, sad song. I decided to write its antithesis. :heart:

:iconglory-be-project:

Submitting to #Writers-Workshop for the free verse workshop. The only tool I missed was dialogue. :( I'll bet =AzizrianDaoXrak beats me: [link]
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
:blackrose: Your lovely poetry has been featured here: fav.me/d6ogtjc
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! <3
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Truly brilliant <3
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. <3
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013   General Artist
I have featured this piece here :love:
Consider giving the article a :+fav: so more people can see it. :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Done! Thanks! :D
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Astrikos Featured By Owner May 25, 2013   General Artist
:heart:
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013   General Artist
Wow! Very powerful and touching!
:tighthug:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Astrikos Featured By Owner May 25, 2013   General Artist
:heart:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, this is just stunning, well done!
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :)
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
THis is quite awesome! :la:

'swaddle your faith
in iron so you know at least one absolute.' had to be my favorite part.
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like that line, too. :heart: Thank you!
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
I really enjoyed reading the last stanza (the one before "love"). It wrapped up your poem beautifully. :clap:
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
Touching, gentle and evocative words. :coffeecup:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad you wrote against the song he gave you. This is lovely and it's always great to see something uplifting come into my inbox!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
So..so..so much emotion. That finale has a pulse!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
There's nothing I can say that hasn't already been said by those who've already commented, but, this is truly beautiful.
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
There's an undercurrent of struggle and yearning here, which I can definitely relate to. :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is breath-taking. So soft and wise. It has the rhythm and feel of gentle guidance. I especially love the way you ended it so simply.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional Writer
swaddle your faith
in iron so you know at least one absolute.


Yes.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Kayru-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I usually don't like modern poetry but this just.... it speaks to me and I can't even describe quite why. It is true poetry. I love it.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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xRixt Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Its beautiful
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :heart:
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riparii Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
One of my favorites of yours.
One thing I love is how a metaphor
not only sounds/looks lovely but also
snaps into place, in terms of sense.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Beautiful!
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A pleasure! (:
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous. I absolutely adore its gentle rhythm.

You think I can beat you? :iconchallengeacceptedplz:
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm positive of it. :B You're a much more accomplished poet.
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thanks ^^

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GothKoala439 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. You never fail to astound me. :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you!
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013   Writer
This is beautiful, really so.
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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