[link]When it's over, so they say
it'll rain a sunny day.
My crit for
I am looking for general impressions, mostly, but a few questions as well:
1) Is there any language that is too obscure to be easily understood? Any metaphors that seem cliche?
2) Does the ending feel like a resolution? Is the imagery understood? (I've had a difficult time finding the right wording for what I want to portray here, so I'm very insecure about that last section).
3) Is there any place where the flow felt "off"?
Edited once more. Removed some unnecessary details and articles and rearranged a couple sentences. Small edits, but I think they enhance the piece on the whole.