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this is the way we are set loose:
like bulls released from their pens -
all anger and bucking fear,
unaware that we have thrown away
the most harmless annoyance

& quivering, we await
the wrath of realized
mistakes - the end
of the fray.
For *glossolalias's journal project: [link]

My song was Red Thread: [link]

I liked it very much. :)

I listened more to the mood of the music than to the lyrics.
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
thank you for participating :heart:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013   Writer
I like that opening simile. And isn't that just the way we go forth, sometimes. And how can you ever undo an action, un-fray what's frayed? Actually, maybe you can un-fray textiles... I know precisely bupkis about them, haha. But at any rate. Love the emotion and sliver of human nature captured here!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I used 'fray' quite deliberately for its double-meaning. :D I don't think you can u-fray stuff. Only cut off the damaged bit and protect the rest of it a little better. Thanks for your comment Jamie. :heart:
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Writer
Yes, it's an excellent double meaning in this context. Ha! There might just be a life lesson there you know...
My pleasure :)
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Yup. It is like that. Too often. Why does it take poetry to say how it IS? I mean, this wouldn't feel as true, were it not for the metaphors and music. Anyway. Good stuff!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's a very good question. I guess the world is so accustomed to comfortable lies that we don't recognize the simple elegance of truth.
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