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Poetry Basics: Brevity

Mon Nov 18, 2013, 11:03 PM


Brevity: n. the quality of expressing much in few words.



When I was in tenth grade, I took my first literature course. It was a six week exploration of poetry. The first poem my teacher showed us was Ezra Pound's In a Station of the Metro:

The apparition of faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.

I, in all of my 16-year-old knowledge of the intricacies of what poetry is, informed my teacher that those two lines were not a poem. 

"You don't think so?"

"No. They don't rhyme, they are just one metaphor, and did I mention they're only two lines?"

"We'll see." 

She sure showed me. ;)

Importance in Poetry


Pound's poem is considered such a great work because he inserts several layers into a single image. Using only 13 words he evokes an entire painting within the reader's mind. You can hear the sounds of the trains, see the fatigue of a mother wrestling with her cranky toddler, watch the homeless man leaning against a pillar swaddled in blankets scratching his dog behind the ears. In just 13 words, Pound has put you in the middle of that train station, and then let you wander around to observe what you will. 

Great poems rely on the imagination and intelligence of the reader. It is a conversation, not a lecture. Poems that stick with us provide enough information to leave an impression, to define an idea. The writer expects that the reader will have their own interpretations of an image. Brevity in poetry helps a writer focus the reader's attention on a specific thought path, so that eventually they draw similar conclusions. 

So How Does It Work?


"Perfection is achieved not when there is nothing more to add, but when there is nothing left to take away." -Antoine de Saint-Exupery

That is the essense of it. Your first drafts will likely be long, meandering idea dumps. And that is perfectly fine. When inspiration hits, go with it. Let the words flow out of you however you like them to flow. It is in the editing phase that brevity becomes important, because it is in that stage that you ought to start thinking about your audience, the message you wish to convey, and the tools you want to use to convey it. 

Some Tips:

:bulletpink: Avoid generalizations. Using words that can be applied to several different ideas (e.g. "something", "anyone", "all the time") is generally not a good idea. Those types of phrases don't give your reader a direction to follow, and your message can get lost in personal interpretation.

:bulletpink: Cut out unnecessary words. The usual culprits are articles and prepositions. These tiny words can make your writing much more verbose than it needs to be. When I edit, I highlight every article and preposition, then cross out the ones that can be crossed out without losing clarity. 

:bulletpink: Watch out for cliches. I am not one of those writers who avoids a cliche at all costs. Cliches are alright in some instances, but they should be used with caution and intelligence. When you find one, try to find a way to phrase your thought that reflects how you feel about/interpret the subject.
 
:bulletpink: Ask yourself if the reader needs this information. A lot of times, writers insert much more information in a poem than is actually needed to convey their message. If your words aren't conveying something important, they're wasting space. A good critic can help you find these words and phrases and put them back in their box. 

:bulletpink: Read. A lot. You don't learn how to write without reading. So read everything, and analyze how other writers manage to package their ideas into as few words as possible. I also recommend following good critics here on dA and reading their critiques. (I'm thinking specifically of thorns, ShadowedAcolyte and Nichrysalis here.) Often the problems you're having in writing, many other writers are also having. Reading critiques is a great way to pick up tips for improvement without having to get critique on your own work. 

A Few Examples from DeviantART


Here are just a few pieces from my favorites gallery that exemplify how brevity works in poetry. Have a read, and suggest some of your own favorites in the comments below!

open opinionthe empty mouth of poetry
all blackened throat
and stunted teeth
an echo
explaining
standard shapes
to me
all these walls
want (you
to want)
all these walls
  Observation
You just need focus,
the tree is the simpler task.
From humanity
One must expect blurred edges,
truth inferred rather than seen.
I was Eros once.I stuffed my throat,
eyes,
and pockets full of roses.
I tied myself up with heartstrings.
I set myself on fire.
The Wilful EmptyIt's that spot on the wall.
Where wolfish shadows play,
Uncoffined eyes dancing
On their leash, hooked
To that spot on the wall.
Swept empty by soft fingered
Brooms, gaunt ribs tonguing
Their cage, white fowls pecking
At that spot on the wall.
The most important crime
Must be repeated, eyelashes
Knocking at the door; the most
Important crime.
It's that spot on the wall.
BreakingOne day, you will open the cupboard
to find a wine glass or some Tupperware
and the world will, without warning
or alarm, roll off the edge of the shelf
and coming crashing down.
The oceans will splash onto the linoleum,
onto the rug. All the dust in all the deserts
will rain down onto the couch and coffee table,
the hills will crumble, the mountains will break,
all the windows in all the cities will shatter
and fall, a thousand dangerous miles of glass
glittering on your kitchen floor.
Everything will hush.
Exhale the breath you are holding,
and go look for a dust pan, for a broom.
   

Remember, brevity doesn't always mean writing a very short poem. It is being economical and conscious about your word-choice. Practice makes perfect, so go forth and write!

....then edit. ;)

:heart: Lili




An introduction to how brevity works in poetry for %projecteducate's Poetry Basics Week! 

Many thanks to *Carmalain7 and *MineralAccident for their help writing the article. :heart:
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L-Inque Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gospel! 
:)
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A-Wandering-Man Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Student Writer
I hate to be a downer, but brevity is only useful if you've already gotten the hang of imagery. You can't take out unnecessary fluff without having some necessary fluff in there to start with. Start long, then edit or re-write until it's sufficiently condensed.

Note that brevity isn't always necessary or useful... Oscar Wilde's "Panthea" is both an absurdly long poem and an exceptionally beautiful one.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I repeat: Brevity doesn't mean writing a very short poem. It means using your words economically to provide your reader with the clearest image possible. Wilde wrote a long poem, but he still used his words in the most economical fashion he could. 

And I believe I did say that the editing phase is where brevity becomes something to focus on. :\
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A-Wandering-Man Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Student Writer
Ah, well I assumed brevity = short. Didn't mean to be mean, just wanted to put my two cents in, as it were.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013   Writer
Thanks for including me!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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fyoot Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013   Writer
There are some great examples of very very short (but effective) poetry at #minimalit

Awesome article, thanks :)
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes. I had forgotten about that group. :ashamed:
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Siocain Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

I read your article with big interest because I think I write short poems with few words. (Not as short as your example above :))

So, can you please take a look at two of my poems and say what you think about them: fav.me/d6rff6v and fav.me/d6rfdh3

Thank you!

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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Do you want actual critique, or just a comment on what I got out of them?
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Siocain Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Just a comment, please. :)
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HenekoMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
Go tips :) thanks for sharing. 
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No prob! :)
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HenekoMarie Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
*good
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ErinM31 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013
Haha, we know everything when we are young, yes? ;) I informed people that Picasso was not that great and there is no way that time could be relative! :XD:

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Thank you for this insightful article! :love:

My favorite is that famous poem by Margaret Atwood:

You fit into me
like a hook into an eye

a fish hook
an open eye
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:lol: That sounds like something I'd have said as well. 

Good choice. Atwood was never my cup of tea, but she does have her moments.
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Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013

"brevity doesn't always mean writing a very short poem. It is being economical and conscious about your word-choice."

you should start the article with that. I see far too many tiny poems that use 'brevity' as an excuse for being terrible. I'm sorry, not terrible, just badly written. I mean not bad, I mean awful. You know, the kind of awful you see when a toddler decides to paint the walls of the dining room with their own feces. I mean, the toddler is creating art, of a sort, and any creativity should be nurtured... right?

I ranted. -endrant-
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Those people are no doubt new to poetry. They are toddlers. Some of them will learn to turn those feces paintings into masterpieces. Others will not. 
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Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
true
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PurpleInk777 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
:iconawesomesaucesignplz: :iconfeatureplz:

:iconsuperthanksplz: For sharing! :salute:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome! :)
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PurpleInk777 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
:hug:
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MineralAccident Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Student Writer
I rather don't belong here, but thank you my dear. Well written glimpse into brevity.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You rather do. Deal with it. ;P
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aegiandyad Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
Have you decided yet
what poetry is?

A good friend once defined it to me
as any piece of writing
which does not take up
all the available space on the page.

How important to him
were the empty spaces?

[early work of Mr a*'s, actually published in Rhodesian Poetry, a rather snooty magazine which took its time coming to accept that I was a poet. Two Tone, a bi-lingual quarterly, had been publishing my work for years. The interesting thing about this piece is that it illustrates the definition, in that it was a piece of prose writing until I divded it into lines and 'stanzas'. The magazine that turned its nose up at my real poetry had accepted a piece of prose disguised as poetry! Brevity is a virtue, especially in modern poetry, and I came to that through Ezra Pound, strangely enough I remember 'Spring, too long    Congula'  being one example. Then I wrote

Hanging in a basket, beneath him
A reflection of the Universe;
A Palomar astronomer.

Which was my first real poem. I read Milton's Paradise Lost once. It goes on for 16 lines before you even reach the first verb that isn't in a sub-clause and then continues for 10 lines more before you get to the first full stop, if memory serves.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can only say what it is not, and it is not simply prose with line breaks. lol.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Succinctly put. :P


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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I see what you did there. ;P
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neurotype Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No u!
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Bark Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Professional Writer
:nod: Agree.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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inknalcohol Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013   Writer
Awesome article.  AND, it makes total sense to me.  I may just learn something this week.  :squee:  Thank you.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:w00t: That's the idea!
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good points all. :dalove:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
 
these are perfect examples of beauty in brevity. i wish the last two would have more views and :+fav:s just like the first three.
i like the lovely presentation of your article: neat and concise. i need more stuff like this to educate me so thank you.

these are (some) of my favorites: brevity


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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :)
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BeccaJS Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013   Writer
Fantastic article Lili! Thank you x
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not a prob! :)
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
Thank you for using a poem of mine as an illustration :love:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was the first one I thought of. :D
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